This feels thoughtfully made—like someone trusted the reader to keep up, linger, and bring their own weather to the page. I appreciate that kind of writing more than I can neatly explain.
I was going to say this felt thoughtful and pondering but someone else beat me to it! It's a little eerie, but mostly it feels peaceful, which might sound odd!
Classic Uncle thoughts. Road trips are like that. There is also horror on the road in the depths of an empty bag of chips that was once full and is now just a bag of shadows.
The way you build dread through such a small space is really effective. The unsaid parts are scarier than anything spelled out - the reader fills in the horror. That 77-word overage was worth it for the tension you created.
God man, you are so Brautigan! Not sure if I'm qualified to say that, but I am saying it anyway. Also the 'she' in this story reminds me of the ghost woman who drowned in the car in the Canadian film called, from memory, 'Ghost'. I think it was made in the 1970s. Great read. Thanks.
You told a story. You may not see the compliment in those words but I assure you I mean the highest of praise. So often, many beautiful words and phrases forget to tell a story.
This feels thoughtfully made—like someone trusted the reader to keep up, linger, and bring their own weather to the page. I appreciate that kind of writing more than I can neatly explain.
Thank you for those words, Lance 🖤
I was going to say this felt thoughtful and pondering but someone else beat me to it! It's a little eerie, but mostly it feels peaceful, which might sound odd!
Hah, I’ll take that! That what somewhat the goal - a calm haunt. Thank you, Vicky.
You're welcome! I forgot how I came across you here but I'm glad I did!
love the atmosphere of this piece...
Thank you so much Jasmine!
I am not scared. I don’t look.
Yeah good job you landed that plane 🔥
this was beautifully written and really keeps you gripped the whole time, its like a descent, you really feel like you're in the character's head
thank you Lee! thanks for the prompt
Classic Uncle thoughts. Road trips are like that. There is also horror on the road in the depths of an empty bag of chips that was once full and is now just a bag of shadows.
This is an amazing piece, thanks for sharing. Your writing is inspiring! When you can, check out my work
Thank you so much Alex. On my way!
Appreciate you!
The way you build dread through such a small space is really effective. The unsaid parts are scarier than anything spelled out - the reader fills in the horror. That 77-word overage was worth it for the tension you created.
Oh man, what a compliment. Thank you so much for that, Adia. It really does help
God man, you are so Brautigan! Not sure if I'm qualified to say that, but I am saying it anyway. Also the 'she' in this story reminds me of the ghost woman who drowned in the car in the Canadian film called, from memory, 'Ghost'. I think it was made in the 1970s. Great read. Thanks.
Understated yet chilling
You told a story. You may not see the compliment in those words but I assure you I mean the highest of praise. So often, many beautiful words and phrases forget to tell a story.
You wrote this as though you respect the reader, and I love that. Enjoyed this!
What a thoughtful comment. Thank you sincerely for this. I really appreciate this kind of insight